Good Things 1) You had great quote choices 2) You had good lead ins 3) You had okay transitions THINGS YOU COULD FIX 1) You could have a bigger vocabulary 2) You could make it less one sided 3) You could go less opinionated Reply
Good Things
1) You had great quote choices
2) You had good lead ins
3) You had okay transitions
THINGS YOU COULD FIX
1) You could have a bigger vocabulary
2) You could make it less one sided
3) You could go less opinionated